tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9119615232600399164.post8183787513585423918..comments2023-09-20T15:14:58.778-04:00Comments on Carmen DeSousa: 500 and Counting: A Short Story ~ The Pit StopCarmen DeSousahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14802237651430170152noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9119615232600399164.post-2630509898791864752012-06-26T22:11:22.503-04:002012-06-26T22:11:22.503-04:00I must say, MJ, I was with Marie originally, but I...I must say, MJ, I was with Marie originally, but I liked your idea. I love a story with a slight paranormal, so it stays believable, so we'll have to see how we can keep this going. Please stop in tomorrow and see how I worked your suggestions and mentioned Marie's thoughts too. Thanks!Carmen DeSousahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14802237651430170152noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9119615232600399164.post-89039341740517744432012-06-26T22:08:32.185-04:002012-06-26T22:08:32.185-04:00Thank you, Sandy. Please come back tomorrow and se...Thank you, Sandy. Please come back tomorrow and see which direction our story took and feel free to give your feedback.Carmen DeSousahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14802237651430170152noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9119615232600399164.post-58775159818093072972012-06-26T22:07:26.709-04:002012-06-26T22:07:26.709-04:00Marie, believe it or not, I originally saw them in...Marie, believe it or not, I originally saw them in a purgatory type situation--and you'll see that in tomorrow's 500 words. And I haven't ruled out any type of paranormal. Thank you for your feedback and I hope you will enjoy the direction I took with MJ's leading and will add some more feedback for me.Carmen DeSousahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14802237651430170152noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9119615232600399164.post-76632338330642387872012-06-21T09:50:34.333-04:002012-06-21T09:50:34.333-04:00Wow! What great ideas...I should do this with ever...Wow! What great ideas...I should do this with every story. More please, or thoughts on the two ideas so far. Loving this!Carmen DeSousahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14802237651430170152noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9119615232600399164.post-15526225449971842652012-06-21T09:40:38.845-04:002012-06-21T09:40:38.845-04:00Ideas? Hmm...it could be a dream that was so reali...Ideas? Hmm...it could be a dream that was so realistic he thought it was real. They can keep cycling back to the same country store every night (when he goes to sleep) and each time something new about his grandparents emerge that give him clues as to how they were murdered years ago.....which put him on the trail of their killer, because he's a detective, and eventually puts him and his wife/girlfriend in a life and death situation. How you like that for musing!!! lolM.J. Kanehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06796479140761752446noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9119615232600399164.post-21433326490476898382012-06-20T09:56:46.764-04:002012-06-20T09:56:46.764-04:00Wonderful! Off to share!Wonderful! Off to share!Sandyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00582993818390954232noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9119615232600399164.post-38494478664925324352012-06-20T09:03:52.579-04:002012-06-20T09:03:52.579-04:00Thank you, Marie, for your feedback. I'm going...Thank you, Marie, for your feedback. I'm going to hold my comments until later today, but I wanted you to know I saw your comment. :)Carmen DeSousahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14802237651430170152noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9119615232600399164.post-43409884511833650022012-06-20T06:51:49.922-04:002012-06-20T06:51:49.922-04:00Carmen, I like this and you can do this two ways. ...Carmen, I like this and you can do this two ways. The couple are already dead, not remembering the crash they were in or do a jump into an alternate dimension where they meet copies of people who live on earth. I hope to see more of this story.Marie Gilberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07275544861810872122noreply@blogger.com