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"She didn’t have that good of a sense of humor" Excerpt from ENTANGLED DREAMS

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This is just an excerpt. If you have time and want to read the first three chapters, they are here.

From the first chapter... Nicky is realizing more than ever that her life is heading in the wrong direction... She's lost both of her parents, has a worthless boyfriend, and she still has to go to work.

This week’s excerpt:


As soon as she stepped off the flight of stairs to their apartment, Jonathan jumped out of an old, beat-up Camaro. “Hey, Nic! I’m glad I caught you. Joey from work just dropped me off, but I was hoping I could take you to work so I could use the car.”

Joey from work, she thought internally. She wondered what kind of work her boyfriend was doing this week. Not wanting to fight about the car, she sighed. “My dad died last night.” The tears she’d been restraining poured freely. Thankfully, she wore waterproof mascara. Couldn’t work without it.

He stepped toward her and wrapped his arms around her shoulders. “Oh, Nicky, I’m sorry. Why are you going to work, then?”
“We need the money.”
“But…”
There was nothing else to say. He couldn’t argue with her, and she knew he wouldn’t anyway. They had been dating for six years, basically, since she was sixteen. Their on-again, off-again relationship was almost comical. Comical to everyone else that is. She didn’t have that good of a sense of humor.



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  1. Veronica ScottSunday, July 01, 2012

    So much going on here, as with all your great stories, can't wait to read it! Terrific six!

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    1. Carmen DeSousaSunday, July 01, 2012

      Thank you, Veronica, a woman who knows me well. Who knows I knock them flat on their back before I pick them up. Can't help it; it's what I do. :)

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  2. MJ KaneSunday, July 01, 2012

    A girls gotta do what a girls gotta do....That's why women are so tough! Great six!

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  3. Kate WarrenSunday, July 01, 2012

    Sad scene. Poor girl.

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    1. Carmen DeSousaSunday, July 01, 2012

      I'm sorry, Kate. Didn't you read my bio? All my stories start off sad. I'm a product of Disney fairytales. Which means, however, that there is usually a "happily ever after" for at least some of my characters. LOL! :)

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  4. Jess SchiraSunday, July 01, 2012

    Sounds like it's past time for her to throw him back, and start fishing for someone a bit better suited. Nice six.

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    1. Carmen DeSousaSunday, July 01, 2012

      That sounds like a very good idea, Jess. I hope you'll come back next week. :)

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