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Excerpt from romantic-suspense bestseller, SHE BELONGS TO ME

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“Are you still at the movies? You can finish and meet me at Starbucks when it’s over.” Jaynee spoke the words nonchalantly as if she couldn’t fathom the notion he had been waiting all evening to see her.
“Are you kidding?” he burst out. “I hardly even know what I was watching. I’ll meet you at the restaurant. You haven’t left yet, right?”
“No, I have about fifteen minutes. I have a couple—”
“Good.” He cut off her words. “I’ll come and get you.” He hung up the phone before she could argue. He didn’t like the idea of her walking out to her car alone. She was strong-willed and probably never asked for an escort.
How many calls had he received where a waitress was attacked leaving work? Real-life predators knew tipped employees walked out with cash money. With Jaynee it was doubly tempting, as she looked appealing too.




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  1. Veronica ScottSunday, October 14, 2012

    This was such a good book, full of twists and turns I never saw coming! Excellent excerpt.

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    1. Carmen DeSousaSunday, October 14, 2012

      Thank you, Veronica. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

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  2. AnonymousSunday, October 14, 2012

    I like the characterization of Jaynee, thanks for sharing!

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    1. Carmen DeSousaSunday, October 14, 2012

      Thanks for stopping by and commenting, Kelworth.

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  3. Anastasia VitskySunday, October 14, 2012

    Good luck with your books!

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  4. patonlorraineSunday, October 14, 2012

    Great six, Carmen! Foreshadowing perhaps?

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    1. Carmen DeSousaSunday, October 14, 2012

      Always, Lorraine! When my publisher asks, "Is this part necessary?" My response is usually, "Ummm...yeah, or I wouldn't have put it there." LOL! And then the stuff I said we could cut, she didn't want to because she liked it. So, yes, 110k words of foreshadowing or scenes that are too sweet to cut. Thanks for stopping by. Hope you're doing well and that we'll see your book soon. :)

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